Writing task re-telling an event

LI: To retell and describe an event or an experience. Sentence starters. Punctuation. I’m ready to pounce, like a tiger watching its prey , my hand overs over my empty cup sitting on the hot concrete. Neves tingling I look around at the hot sunny day, birds chirp, kids shout and clouds are dotted around the bright blue skies suddenly I’m brought out of my trance “go!” My feet scutter as I race toward the plastic bucket, my plastic cup sits between my fasinned lips I reach the bucket with too much speed I skid along the rough concrete, quickly dipping my cuo into the water before sticking it back between my lips. I feel a strange slightly tart taste on my mouth I run back to where I started and tip myb water into my own. I repeat the process about 6 times, Ethan and I are head to head when time is called, I sigh and tip my head back in extraction beads of sweat threatening to pursue my skin. Now that's what I call writing.